Please rewrite this essay according to the notes that the professor left. I fail

Please rewrite this essay according to the notes that the professor left. I failed to come up with a clear thesis statement. For this essay I want to explain that students should go to college after high school and properly include a counterclaim regarding why it’s best to go to trade school after high school. 
In the file attached is the rubric as well as the paper that needs to be written with the teachers comments.